Der Kampf: The Rise and Fall of the Austrian Führer
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Well, the thing is that aside of the territorial loss, that it was gifted to a Russian/Soviet enemy that handed it to an enemy of the revolution.
I'd think that even of the news about it would be probably strictly controled/restricted by the Soviet régime. It still would be considered as massive loss of face both for the State as for Sverdlov.
Given that, I think that even if he would be willing to take his time to recover it. I think that he would feel forced to take some kind of measure both to secure his position/ensure to chose somebody high enough in the Party/Nomenklatura, to take the blame.. And about the diplomatic isolation plus this defeat/humiliation.
So, would seems that at a minimum he would feel that the Soviet Union, barring the war, wouldn't have any other option but to withdraw from the LoN.
“Still got the moves!” And yes it is!
I wouldn’t doubt it. Remember this USSR is more supportive of militant revolution elsewhere though this leaves it as a pariah for longer.
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Things have the potential to get very, very bad in South Tyrol. And thank you! Yes, Lutjens is going through a very thought time indeed.
Lol, wasn’t intended but it sure worked out that way. Cadorna was so despised by his fellow field marshals/generals/soldiers that I doubt any would shed a tear.
Thank you!
This could lead to a mini-purge though not on the level of the First Great Purge just yet. That comes in the 30s. And the USSR isn’t a part of the LoN at this time.
What are the odds? The day I come back from my AH hiatus one of my favorite TLs comes back too
This needs a question mark at the end instead of a full stop
Certified bruh moment
The two "befores" could be ironed out, perhaps you could reconstruct the sentence like:
Hitler gave a look across his office desk at the Embassy's First Secretary before taking a deep drink of his coffee **and** responding
Or just a complete restructuring, your choice. Or you might even want to keep it as it is, but hmm idk am I being fussy?
Nero Decree intensifies
The usage of "older" has a number of flaws, firstly it is used twice in quick succession, secondly, its use here is incorrect since older than what? there is no reference point (though when you say the "older officer" further on in the section, it IS correct since it does have a reference point)
To make this more polished I'd say remove the first older altogether, maybe replace it with another adjective, and change the second older to 'old'
Will never forget back in the day when one of my 'supervisors' in school was mobbed by tens of kids, as he was beating someone... the guy was so hated and so feared, but that one moment was just 👌
For a second I genuinely thought 'E hailing' was some sort of twisted new salute 😂 then I realised you meant exhaling (so not 'hail' and you need an x)
'All he knew about her was that she was likely a prostitute' (you forgot the she)
Crotch???
LET'S GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
LAß DER LICHT AUS FREIDEN SCHEINEN
DAß NIE EINE MUTTER MEHR
IHREN SOHN BEWEINT! IHREN SOHN BEWEINT!
(btw would appreciate greater description of the People's Red Flag, it just would have more impact, like 'a yellow-rimmed blood red star, within it a hammer and sickle intertwined, deep gold...' or something lol I'm not being fully serious)
Needs question mark at end instead of dot
💀
A grand chess master as there ever was, really he played the world like a fiddle... undone with a single move (don't send your queen in the middle of infinite pawns) (reference to Barbarossa lol)
Comrade Sphinx is not pleased, comrade [You must serve the Proletariat, not yourself]
Comrade Sphinx is not pleased, comrade [You must serve the Proletariat, not yourself]
Comrade Sphinx is not pleased, comrade [You must serve the Proletariat, not yourself]
Comrade Beria was talking to an aide, and he said 'we should pack 12 suitcases with nuclear bombs and send them to every Western capital, especially Washington, and blow them all up!' his aide said, 'comrade there is a problem with that plan' 'what?' said Beria, 'we don't have enough suitcases', said the aide 💀
Dk why that reminded me of that
NO NOOOOOOO AH I AM ENJOYING THIS SO MUCH WHY WOULD YOU SKIP
YES DON'T PLEASE NO
Stinkin' capitalism, distribute it for free among the world population, but seriously I genuinely think that's under-priced, I think Diary of a Wimpy Kid is like 12 dollars bruh
*Rubs hands together*
I'm not sure if you've even looked at my edited version of Storm of Steel 🤣 but if you want I could do something similar with this TL?
Always happy to help,
Wonderful and explosive chapter
Keep writing 👍
I find your username hilarious considering you are one of the best users I know 🤣
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i though of the username because in real life i tend to say stuff sometimes in a very bad way.
So, i know that at some point i might say something that to me sounds like just normal discussion, but the admins might see at first as something needing to be banned.
Thus i'm already giving my plea for mercy if it happens 😂
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I've been registered for only for 2 years are you telling me i'm somehow renowned?
No not renowned but all the posts I've seen by you are good, yk, no crap posting. Also yeah I get what you mean has happened to me before 💀
Happy coincidence!
I will edit and apply these in the final draft which I'm working on right now.This needs a question mark at the end instead of a full stop
Certified bruh moment
The two "befores" could be ironed out, perhaps you could reconstruct the sentence like:
Hitler gave a look across his office desk at the Embassy's First Secretary before taking a deep drink of his coffee **and** responding
Or just a complete restructuring, your choice. Or you might even want to keep it as it is, but hmm idk am I being fussy?
Nero Decree intensifies
The usage of "older" has a number of flaws, firstly it is used twice in quick succession, secondly, its use here is incorrect since older than what? there is no reference point (though when you say the "older officer" further on in the section, it IS correct since it does have a reference point)
To make this more polished I'd say remove the first older altogether, maybe replace it with another adjective, and change the second older to 'old'
Will never forget back in the day when one of my 'supervisors' in school was mobbed by tens of kids, as he was beating someone... the guy was so hated and so feared, but that one moment was just 👌
For a second I genuinely thought 'E hailing' was some sort of twisted new salute 😂 then I realised you meant exhaling (so not 'hail' and you need an x)
'All he knew about her was that she was likely a prostitute' (you forgot the she)
Crotch???
LET'S GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO
LAß DER LICHT AUS FREIDEN SCHEINEN
DAß NIE EINE MUTTER MEHR
IHREN SOHN BEWEINT! IHREN SOHN BEWEINT!
(btw would appreciate greater description of the People's Red Flag, it just would have more impact, like 'a yellow-rimmed blood red star, within it a hammer and sickle intertwined, deep gold...' or something lol I'm not being fully serious)
Needs question mark at end instead of dot
💀
A grand chess master as there ever was, really he played the world like a fiddle... undone with a single move (don't send your queen in the middle of infinite pawns) (reference to Barbarossa lol)
Comrade Sphinx is not pleased, comrade [You must serve the Proletariat, not yourself]
Comrade Sphinx is not pleased, comrade [You must serve the Proletariat, not yourself]
Comrade Sphinx is not pleased, comrade [You must serve the Proletariat, not yourself]
Comrade Beria was talking to an aide, and he said 'we should pack 12 suitcases with nuclear bombs and send them to every Western capital, especially Washington, and blow them all up!' his aide said, 'comrade there is a problem with that plan' 'what?' said Beria, 'we don't have enough suitcases', said the aide 💀
Dk why that reminded me of that
NO NOOOOOOO AH I AM ENJOYING THIS SO MUCH WHY WOULD YOU SKIP
YES DON'T PLEASE NO
Stinkin' capitalism, distribute it for free among the world population, but seriously I genuinely think that's under-priced, I think Diary of a Wimpy Kid is like 12 dollars bruh
*Rubs hands together*
I'm not sure if you've even looked at my edited version of Storm of Steel 🤣 but if you want I could do something similar with this TL?
Always happy to help,
Wonderful and explosive chapter
Keep writing 👍
As of now the Der Kampf novel is 356 pages. Still editing it so that will definitely change.
Also considering adding a Historical Note section that points out what happened in OTL and the differences in this TL. That could be messy but I figure some of the readers won't be very diehard history people so may not know what is historical or fictional, especially in the 1920s.
As I work away on the edit, I'm still conflicted on what the title for Book 1 should be.
My placeholder is 'For the Fatherland' but some have said that is too generic. I'm open to suggestions. The series title will be Der Kampf, but I'm still in need of book 1 title. I already have a WiP title for Book 2: Rogue Ambassador. Any help will be greatly appreciated.
Yeah that's defo too generic, no offence... I will certainly try to think of some names for you, names are really important.
Some very basic ideas that I've just come up with on the spot ( I will think about this for some time before adding some more sophisticated suggestions)
From the Ashes, a Monster Rises (Heck no what the heck that's way too long lol)
Evil's Human Face (I don't like this tbh)
Howl of the Wol(f/ves) (yeah again maybe we shouldn't overuse wolf)
Making of a Monster (Probably already a book lol)
A Desolate Horizon (hmm inferring the future?)
Evil's Salvation (Ooh I think this is the best so far, now I am going to post the message lol)
Ooh I like that, but I think it might be a bit long, but no it defo sounds quite fitting... although perhaps we shouldn't absolutely milk the word 'wolf'
EDIT:
I reckon Evil's Salvation is quite good, it refers both to Hitler surviving through the war and all that AND 'evil "saving" him', in this second context "salvation" would be more referring to like "embrace" or yk, evil taking hold of him, or rather him turning to evil. It's kind of an interesting double meaning, just thought I'd point it out. I'm sure others are going to find some other meaning I didn't even intend lol
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Perhaps could be used this options: the making/rise of an Austrian Führer or the road to a very Austrian dictatorship...
Für das österreichische Vaterland
May be an Option.
Österreich, Österreich Über Allem
is also an Option but fits the WW2 Book more I guess?
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Hey, y’all. Currently editing Book 1. I’ve finished the formatting and about 20% through the grammar. Once I’m done with this rough draft I’ll be contacting a few of y’all for beta feedback.
Work on next chapter is coming along slowly. I have the first half-ish done.
Work on next chapter is coming along slowly. I have the first half-ish done.
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A tad Necro.
But I would change it to Wolf of the Balkans.
Not really a big fan of using the word wolf in the title, though.