You've amazed me with the "Battle of Whitby", now you've left me speechless again. Honestly, I believe you should seriously think about publish this wonderful story on paper or at least in an e-book version, it deserves that, I agree
in toto with Dunois.
Is the starting narration the prelude of the
Foyle's Nuclear War? Maybe has the Police just discovered another victim of our mysterious serial killer?
The first thought I had when the helicopter crew landed was "Oh no, not another
On the beach Epic Fail™! Indeed I really felt the time slow to a
stop when I read
No use. Mission failed.
For ages, the whole crew sit in silence and just listen to the rain hammer at the plane's metal skin.
The next scene was a perfect Final Showdown Sequence: the Commando has reached the zenith of insanity, the bullet delivered to the Scientist is a no returning point for everyone. If the Pilot doesn't kill the Commando there will not be any survivor at all. I was sorry for the American, he seemed to me a good bloke.
The "capture" by the US Army was -in a ...strange way- a little bit grotesque: the Prospero guys have survived a transoceanic journey and landing, feral dogs in Iceland, fake VANG thugs, another dangerous trip to the heart of America and now they are sentenced to death by a soldier who have decided irrevocably about who's got a british accent and who don't. Lucky them, they found the Agent, and extra points to you Jack for the "
Ha. I am the Secret Service now. All of it" line
.
The story of the escape from D.C seemed to me kinda realistic: unless an ASB shielded them, was automatic thinkin' that the Soviet hit or at least tryed to hit any known designed facility for the AF1. Anyway the President has survived, always better than the end he met in
Warday.
Equallyreasonablewas the pitiful state of the POTUS: a valiant but old man, proved by repeated massive stress, that was slowly sinking into the oblivion.
I sweated cold, just like in a nightmare, even if it was only fiction, at the
rentrée of the Commando. Believe it or not, yesterday I was thinkin' about how mad was the commando and I thought "If they'll found Reagan or any other acting president he'll probably look for a way to kill even him". I was right
.
Am I right too on presume the second pilot was killed by the blast? My best compliments for the heart-touching last words of Ronnie: I found absolutely realistic his sorrow and sadness, somehow he was one of the men who ended the world, as the Commando would say.
I wonder also how much of the US is still habitable (some pages ago I posted maps of the strikes on the civilian targets and they alone were something dreadful) and who's at least formally on charge, according to the United States presidential line of succession. Will we never know anything about Bush or other key american figures?
Above all, thank you again