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All, I've mentioned on some of my other TL's that I've been working for years on a series of amateur Alt History Books starting with a POD on the Seven Years War.

I've been a bit flighty upon doing this series, going from one era to the next and back as I tried to teach myself how to write (I was not an English or Creative Writing major). I've made up my mind to go back and fix the initial 2 novels on the 7 Years War (Others go through the American Revolutionary War, Alternate War of 1812, 2nd Napoleonic War, War of British Liberation and WWII) this year and see if I can get anyone to publish.

Here was my initial Chapter 1 that started with an alternate Battle of the Monongahela. It was one of the first chapters I ever really tried writing.

I know I need to clean up some grammar and spelling mistakes.
I also think I need to stop over-expositioning and get to more communication though, as the first chapter, I needed to give a bit more exposition than usual in this chapter.

Give me some constructive criticism regarding my style, flow, ability to set the environment, etc:

Thanks for any feedback.
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