The Invincible Battlecruisers

Seems like the British leaders have been on the lead paint again.
I just don't understand what the British are doing here. They've played a strong diplomatic hand appallingly poorly to see battleship numbers severely curtailed, and the political response is mistifying. Scrapping two battleships and converting them into appalling carriers is not something that the RN would recommend- they've been there, tried that, and know full well the limitations. Nor would it be a suitable response to a public angry about battleship numbers. The RN was air minded, the public didn't have the same viewpoint and would just see battleship numbers significantly falling.
I was halfway through an edit last week to turn take revenge and ramillies and switch them out for renown and repulse.
As they themselves do have 15" guns. Are faster, longer and have a better capability to be turned into carriers.
And we would lose 6 outdated battleships and 2 outdated Battlecruisers for 3 new battleships and 2 new Battlecruisers. Wouldn't look as bad I guess either.
Only 1 less than OTL. With 4 old battleships for 2 new battleships.
 
I was halfway through an edit last week to turn take revenge and ramillies and switch them out for renown and repulse.
As they themselves do have 15" guns. Are faster, longer and have a better capability to be turned into carriers.
And we would lose 6 outdated battleships and 2 outdated Battlecruisers for 3 new battleships and 2 new Battlecruisers. Wouldn't look as bad I guess either.
Only 1 less than OTL. With 4 old battleships for 2 new battleships.
Seems like a good idea. Otherwise R&R would be at a serious disadvantage, being able to keep up with the G3s, but unable to take any sort of serious damage.
 
Aircraft
Your all going to hate me and I am sorry.
But I am going to delete the chapters and story.

Generally for reasons that are my own. also the fact I can't seem to continue it in any case.
I'm sorry if you thought this was an update as it is not the sort you were expecting or hoping for.
You have my sincere apologies
 
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“just to point one fact out that the G3s Deck armour is 8” not it's belt, the belt is apparently 14” more than any other battleship being constructed or in service right now
I think special branch might be investigating a case with the official secrets act.... How has that got out on radio by April 1922?

To me its just far more like wardroom talk than 1920s BBC radio with all the self censorship of Reith?
 
To me its just far more like wardroom talk than 1920s BBC radio with all the self censorship of Reith?

to be honest though the BBC radio formed in october of 22 where it started as 2LO and reith was hired in the december.
otherwise you have somewhat of a point.
 
I'm sorry.
First off if you have seen my name I am a slight fan of the Halo game series.
thing is Halo Wars 2 was released today. And my game just arrived. This means that I will binge for a week or two. this binge will be over soon and I will be back to writing chapter 5.
 
Hope you enjoy, Pick it apart, and by the way, chapter 3 has been edited as well to tie in to this chapter, so you will probably need to go back to check some things on there. it's basically that I changed the Idea that they present the idea of replacing the Revenge and Resolution with Renown and Repulse and convert renown and repulse into carriers,
as for the idea with downgrading the guns so they can get a firing solution on aircraft at long ranges, well that came about at work yesterday, between me and a work colleague who is ex army Logistics (I can never remember the actual flippin name) who helped me with the 2 layer Air defense when I asked about the addition of the extreme long range if you know where the general location of the enemy aircraft are with use of radar or something of that sort. he said it would work well at long to medium ranges but below that they are as useless as short range AA against medium to long range (and that even at medium range they would be more than a bit hit and miss)

Japanese (and possibly Germans) were way ahead of you :)

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/San_Shiki_(anti-aircraft_shell)

Not very effective in real life but with 20+ years of development who knows
 
I'm Sorry
Your all going to hate me and I am sorry.
But I am going to delete the chapters and story.

Generally for reasons that are my own. also the fact I can't seem to continue it in any case.
I'm sorry if you thought this was an update as it is not the sort you were expecting or hoping for.
You have my sincere apologies
 
It did to an amount.

Probably because he expected better of me and thought if I'm going to write a story it should be perfect first time. The idiot.
He has a habit of doing this but it was never to the same degree.

I'm a professional writer, people pay me money for it, I've been doing it for well over ten years, I have over 100 published articles and stories. Not one of them was right first time. Best advice anyone ever gave me "only way to get it right is to get it wrong."
 
Your all going to hate me and I am sorry.
But I am going to delete the chapters and story.

Generally for reasons that are my own. also the fact I can't seem to continue it in any case.
I'm sorry if you thought this was an update as it is not the sort you were expecting or hoping for.
You have my sincere apologies
I don't hate you of course I don't.
May I say as a panacea that I believe this time line to have great possibilities
I also heartily endorse @Miss Construction comments.
There are places and times where'' getting it right first time'' is a must .....this isn't one of them.
Constructive criticism is always welcome, the other type is best disregarded as water from a poisoned well.
Kind regards
Hugh
 
If You delete this story, then I feel your father has won! Please leave it on the board. It is your father who is failing rather than you, he appears to have used destructive criticism as a tool to belittle your efforts for his own purposes. Your fellow AH fans here will usually peer review your work and comment on it with honesty and understanding, That in IMHO has far more worth and is a better litmus test of your skill as a writer. Has your father ever published? How does he like criticism for criticism's sake? So take heart and write on please. I could say more but that should be in a PM.
 
Just to add to the other comments, it's worth emphasising that this is an anonymous internet forum where people post stories for free - trying to apply the standard your father wants would wipe out 99% of the work on here, leaving only a handful of professional writers who write AH stories for fun (or in some cases later publication, either via Amazon or Sea Lion Press). The audience is also slightly different on here to the one he may be thinking of - things like characterisation tend to be of far less importance while obscure historical details are treated as far more important.
Ultimately forums like these are a good way to learn how to do better - you can write in small snippets which means you aren't slaving away for hours over a hot keyboard before you have anything, and you get almost instantaneous feedback on what you've produced. There are also some real experts on here - I've learnt so much from the comments on A Blunted Sickle that I would never have done any other way.

That isn't to say that you should continue this story - if the muse has gone then it's gone - but don't let it stop you writing on here.
 
@ Spartan-G257...

I hate to say it but ignore your Dad.

The reason I say this is simple - You will always have detractors, for whatever reason they choose. I write here and I have had people slate me because I swap England and United Kingdon freely. Yes, technically they are different, but it is how I was taught over there.

My point is that you will always have people who think they can do things better than you, and pick fault at the silliest or most pathetic things. The story you write must develop along the lines that as the author, you choose. I am not saying your Dad is being pedantic or picky etc, but what I am saying is that as the author you will always get criticism and that you must choose weather or not to accept and learn by it or to ignore it. If you accept and learn by it then your story can mature and grow, but you should never terminate it because of criticism. Criticism can sound harsh (Like your father's), but he only wants to see your story mature and grow I am sure, and I say this part as having gone through it, criticism by family members is always the hardest to take. My father's criticism has made me want to quit something more than once, and one of my biggest regret's in life is because I listened to him a decade ago and quit something.

He may have been write, he may have been wrong. That is something I will never know now because I listened to him. In hindsight I should have ignored him and found out if what he said was true for myself, and if I could go back I would do exactly that. I have had to learn to live with that mistake and the associated regret and it has been hard. For years I wondered 'What if' every day.

Your Dad may be right. He may quite as easily be wrong.

Having said all of that, my question to you is this: Do you want to live with that 'What if' hanging over you? You can always talk to him and have his creative input into the story if you want.

That's my 2 cents anyway. In the end however the choice and story is yours. Personally I quite liked it and think you should continue. I'll respect your decision either way.
 
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