Red Dead Retribution idea-

So while replaying Red Dead Redemption I got an idea into my head and started to form an idea for a story. Different people different place a bit earlier in time. Dark, unfrorgiving, unsorry. Told like a novel/video game. This would only be updated once in a while since my other TL comes first. But still this would be fun.
Thoughts?
 
Do you have a basic premise, or at least collection of ideas for stories? Have you thought about collaborative work, etc?
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Yeah basicly it would have acts, in different places etc. Sarting off in 1884 with a prolouge, then a short time in 1890. Then we move on. Hey how does the idea of joining a certain group of volunteer riders in 1898 and storming a hill with a certain Bull Moose sound?:D
Of course the title is Retribution so its basicly one whole revenge story with characters I hope to make as colorful and realistic as in RDR
 
Yeah basicly it would have acts, in different places etc. Sarting off in 1884 with a prolouge, then a short time in 1890. Then we move on. Hey how does the idea of joining a certain group of volunteer riders in 1898 and storming a hill with a certain Bull Moose sound?:D
Of course the title is Retribution so its basicly one whole revenge story with characters I hope to make as colorful and realistic as in RDR
Sounds interesting. You need someone to bounce ideas or stories off of, feel free to ask me, I'd be happy to give input.
 
The prolouge is basicly the main character is 8 and his father has fallen on hard times. Lets say outlaws are hired but things go awry and in the end the main character's family is dead, murdered. This kid has uncontrolled hatred and makes his own way through the world. People in the near by town help him out, though he is often put in timeout in the jail for a couple of hours because hell use people's property for target practice. He gets out of his life and becomes a Cowboy.
And I dont mean a outlaw I mean an actual cowboy that herd cattle. Until he heres about an outlaw whos name rings a bell.
 
Yeah it is. The main characters are different but I plan for there to be cameos or even decent sized parts for people like Ricketts, maybe Miss Farlane's father. And the main character is going to tryto get all the help he can get. So he'll make pacts with people he doesnt like. Hunting down criminals for Ross, anyone?
Oh also I plan for there to be a man in a top hat involved occasionally. That seems to have all the knowledge of the main character's past
 
Actually I had my own idea along those lines, although it's conceptuated as a game, a prequel to RDR: Red Dead Rebellion.

Basically, it's set during the American Civil War, following the actions of Bill Marston, the first member of the Marston family to be born in America.
You can work for either the Union or Confederate government (you're choice), going behind enemy lines and destroying supplies, creating dissent, freeing POWs, all that kind of stuff.

Then, after the end of the war, you'll be sent into the South as a peacekeeper if you chose Union, or, if Confederate, you are sent into the North to create dissent.

In the end, the Union government (if you chose them) throws you away like an old phone book and out of anger you become an outlaw, robbing banks and trains, and generally being an awesome Western criminal. If however you areConfederate, you join the cavalry and commit genocide on Native Americans.

In essence, it would be the first modern videogame in which you are predestined to be evil.
 
So while replaying Red Dead Redemption I got an idea into my head and started to form an idea for a story. Different people different place a bit earlier in time. Dark, unfrorgiving, unsorry. Told like a novel/video game. This would only be updated once in a while since my other TL comes first. But still this would be fun.
Thoughts?

What? Is this a story or a video game concept?

If it's the latter, I'm interested. I love video game concept threads.
 
Yeah it is. The main characters are different but I plan for there to be cameos or even decent sized parts for people like Ricketts, maybe Miss Farlane's father. And the main character is going to tryto get all the help he can get. So he'll make pacts with people he doesnt like. Hunting down criminals for Ross, anyone?
Oh also I plan for there to be a man in a top hat involved occasionally. That seems to have all the knowledge of the main character's past

You mean like that Stranger in RDR who appeared to Marston prior to his death.
 
Its probably either death or Satan. With me leaning towards Satan. I heard that back then when people had the devil in plays or pictures he was usually made to be in a top hat and formal suit. Just like the strange man. Also he seems to tempt you. If I rmember correctly he said "you can donate to the nun or- you could rob from her." Now Im not sure if this has any scientific backing but it seems to me that the idea or story you hear last always sticks in your head more.

Also what he says. He says that marston has forgotten far more important people than him. However the most important person is God. However the devil could say that and be refering to God and or Christ. He also says that he hopes his son his just like him. While I did play the game as a good guy I doubt God would want his son to be anything like John. Having to do work for the government because of his past deeds. Also Jesus has already lived and died, however it is said that the AntiChrist has not yet been born.

Now even though I was a good guy perhaps the strange man was referring to Marston being able to convince people to join his side. Then when Marston says "Damn you!" the man replies "Yes, many have." While you hear all the time "God damnit" Thats people asking God to damn a certain thing. Not damning God. However back then a common curse was "Damn the devil."

Now it could be death for the reasons above and I think people have probably cursed death before. However Ive never heard of death having a son.
 
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