This is the place for any discussion of rast's A Shift In Priorities Redubbed which is here.....
The two points critisized mostly in rasts marvelous TL are the late POD and the speed of development, particularly in Middle Africa.
I would propose for you to somewhat rewrite the beginning, for example pre-date the development of Kanobils (first tests already pre-war, Bauer or somebody else taking the idea in 1915, beginning of construction on 1916, something like that). There are also some other ideas around on the forum that could change the war even rather lately without a major POD from rast's TL, just some strategies or errors changed on both sides. Ultimately, it's all about Germany winning rather late in the war.
Considering Mittelafrika, I think quantifying German expenses for development there would do a lot, as would clarifying that many of the wonders of Mittelafrika we see are rather singulary, with vast territories still backward. The battleship program was also critizised - just downsize it: a cruiser built in Mittelafrika at that time is a huge thing, after all. Alternatively you could turn for some of BlondieBC's ideas to win Germany the war: a development scheme having started before the war in Tansania and Cameroon allows for both colonies to survive throughout the war, maybe go on the offensive, and contribute to submarine warfare as in BlondieBC's TL. Helps winning the war and leaves both Cameroon and Tansania with a lot more infrastructure, more troops and already some native educated elites post-war. More or less you'd just move some of the development rast's TL saw to the time before and during WWI.
By the way: I'd also propose that Germany keeps Czechia and Slovenia and maybe considers some annexations in the East.
I also agree that the POD by itself is far too late. To me, what the Germans absolutely need more than anything else is to keep the United States out of the war. With the US, the Entente had an unlimited line of credit, along with supplies, food stuffs and most of all a morale advantage of the prospect that US forces were fresh, etc. That shouldn't be too hard of a POD to accomplish, and then you can combine no US intervention with the earlier development of the Kanoblis (starting in 1915-16) and then you can have them reliably deployed by late 1917 early 1918, then you can definitely see the Germans coming out on top in a very plausible manner.
One other major criticism I had about this TL is that while the US economy all but collapsed, essentially a worse Great Depression, Europe was absolutely untouched. Whenever you have the largest economy in the world imploding, that's going to cause major disruptions no matter how much the Germans attempted to regionalize their economic sphere, and I would have anticipated at the very least a substantial recession in Germany and in most of the other industrialized economies of the world.
One minor nit to pick: All the Kanobils but one have female names. In the original, the name of that tank was Frederike which is the female form of Friedrich/Frederick in German. You used the male version. It' just a matter of reading aesthetics, but it does bother me a bit.
The two points critisized mostly in rasts marvelous TL are the late POD and the speed of development, particularly in Middle Africa.
I would propose for you to somewhat rewrite the beginning, for example pre-date the development of Kanobils (first tests already pre-war, Bauer or somebody else taking the idea in 1915, beginning of construction on 1916, something like that). There are also some other ideas around on the forum that could change the war even rather lately without a major POD from rast's TL, just some strategies or errors changed on both sides. Ultimately, it's all about Germany winning rather late in the war.
Considering Mittelafrika, I think quantifying German expenses for development there would do a lot, as would clarifying that many of the wonders of Mittelafrika we see are rather singulary, with vast territories still backward. The battleship program was also critizised - just downsize it: a cruiser built in Mittelafrika at that time is a huge thing, after all. Alternatively you could turn for some of BlondieBC's ideas to win Germany the war: a development scheme having started before the war in Tansania and Cameroon allows for both colonies to survive throughout the war, maybe go on the offensive, and contribute to submarine warfare as in BlondieBC's TL. Helps winning the war and leaves both Cameroon and Tansania with a lot more infrastructure, more troops and already some native educated elites post-war. More or less you'd just move some of the development rast's TL saw to the time before and during WWI.
By the way: I'd also propose that Germany keeps Czechia and Slovenia and maybe considers some annexations in the East.