OK, so here's the view from the Golden Khersonese:
First up, and since I did not comment on Chapter 12 before now, I am curious about the 3,000 Hungarians who split off from the western
Tagmata and made their way back to Hungary. They are followers of the teachings of John of Florence, opponent of the Eighth Ecumenical Council. So far, following the Unification of the Church, things have been stable in Christendom. But does this religious splinter group, now operating in Hungary, end up "infecting" the north and west of Europe with the heresy that ends up leading to the formation of the Parisian Orthodox Church? If so, it would be interesting for the "spark" of heresy to come via Hungary and not more populous centres like Italy, southern France or Spain.
Also it might be fun (and ironic with OTL) if the western/northern church ends up being called 'Orthodox' and the one based in Constantinople and Rome ends up being called 'Catholic'. This would perhaps neatly solve the problem of the term 'Uniate', which various readers have pointed out is a rather inelegant term.
Basileus Giorgios said:
“…A woman who was undoubtedly a fiend in human form”
I like the theological foreshadowing that this sort of language from Roman history introduces...
Basileus Giorgios said:
On April 16th, 1212, Constantinople fell to an invading army. The conqueror, a brusque young barbarian...How on Earth had things come to this pass?
Like this opening paragraph, which summarises what happened then goes on to explain how: nice technique!
Generally, I like the sense you convey in this and recent chapters that Roman History is little more than a succession of palace plottings, manoeuverings, coups, executions and triumphs of certain elite people based in the court or armies of Constantinople. The urban mob also has a role so this all feels like the "classic" Eastern Roman Empire as it truly was - with the commenting historians realistically showing the same obsessions. As the 'Romaic Renaissance', or whatever you want to call it, slowly comes about, we should get more diverse historical perspectives and a stronger feel for life inside the Empire outside of Constantinople. I for one would like to see greater focus on Italy and - bearing in mind what is coming - I'm sure we'll get that.
orders arrived from Constantinople clarifying that Evagoras should take command.
Does this mean that the Grand Duchy of Cyprus is being set up, or not quite yet?
The first casualty was the Emperor Michael VIII himself, sent out at the head of the imperial bodyguard to attempt to persuade his sister to return to her monastery and abandon her claim to the throne. Theodora the Younger may have personally liked nothing better, but Michael saw himself dragged from his horse, blinded, and beheaded for his troubles by the defecting bodyguard, with his mangled body being hurled over the palace walls with a fistful of arrows shoved violently into the rectum.
God, what a grisly and depraved end. One question though: why are various imperial personages being first blinded then executed on top of that? Usually blinding in Byzantium was a signal that someone was being made unfit to occupy high office, but was otherwise being kept alive, probably for exile far away. The fact that the blindings are mere precursors to execution seems inordinately cruel. Perhaps this is a sign of the unusually tense and high stakes at play in all these power battles of this period?
Also in the previous chapter you mentioned Michael VIII's lack of resolution being down to his grief at a stillborn daughter. Medieval people were quite inured to death in childbirth so this 'humanism' of Michael's seems a little at odds with how people viewed a human that had barely come into the world; perhaps Michael was just a bit soft-headed.
Taken prisoner along with the Patriarch, the pair were forced by the sadistic general into a blasphemous marriage ceremony in the grounds of Constantine Nafpliotis’ obscene pleasure palace
What was this general playing at with this marriage? He must know that a Patriarch cannot marry and stay a patriarch; also vows taken under duress would not be thought of as true marriage. Will the Patriarch's reputation be rehabilitated after death because this is quite a great shame and stain on the sanctity of the Holy Office? By the way are the blinded Patriarch and his 'wife' dispatched in the City, or do they somehow survive?
By the middle of the summer, the flies were well fattened on the blood of the House of Komnenos.
Nice turn of phrase!
Oh, and one last thing: it would be good if we could see the map of Europe recently posted posted again but this time with the names of the various states labelled.