I've been reading this timeline over the past few weeks, and it's quickly become one of my favorite stories on this entire website.
@PyroTheFox, I must really commend you for creating such a coherent and engaging narrative. While it's certainly a slow burn from the late Gilded Age to whenever the socialist revolution finally unfolds, you've made that road itself into a fascinating alternate history. I particularly enjoyed the tension of elections and party conventions; rarely did I feel like they were all too predictable in advance. It takes some skill to balance plausibility and spectacle, but you thread that needle well.
Here are some more specific notes:
- Perhaps most importantly, I noticed that you forgot to threadmark a chapter between 'page' 140 and 141. Specifically this post:
https://www.alternatehistory.com/fo...he-american-left.488521/page-28#post-21304045
- Next, I am quite curious how you've managed to plan and write this timeline. From the very start, you're alluding to events or perspectives which won't properly unfold for many chapters to come, so I wonder how you're able to plot so far ahead if you seem to be writing the chapters themselves one by one. Do you keep to some sort of rigorous outline?
- As much as I enjoy the electoral component of TTL, I think it would also benefit from a bit more focus on social history. Sometimes it seemed the actual presidencies were mere leadups to the next election. Recently though, the outbreak of WW1 and the present wave of strikes has eluded this trend, so it's hardly a fundamental problem. Still, I think certain segments of US society, such as its Black and Indigenous populations, have been kind of left out in the story so far. What's going on with them?
- It's not that important, but I've noticed that you persistently misspell populace as 'populous' and martial as 'marshal'. That's hardly worth noting, were it not that your writing is otherwise impeccable. Thus, those small fixes would make it near-perfect.
- Lastly, have you given any thought to publishing this timeline as an e-book? I'm sure that the people at Sea Lion Press would be interested in such a subtle and well-written narrative. Especially since you're already involving graphs, maps, and in-universe excerpts. I think it has real potential!
Well, that's all I have to say for now. I'm looking forward to the next chapters, as the US turns steadily towards socialism. Solidarity forever!