I liked it, in fact I was wondering how things would turn out in that twisted, twisted place. :D
The problem is...I think it's actually a rule violation, since Ian made a post about that-sort-of-thing before in the Administration section, long after that story was made.
I'm not seeing the rule involved, but I kind of see your point. With some editing you can make it less X-rated and still get the point across.
The problem is I can't actually edit the post because its in a locked thread ;_;
You could do a re-write in a different thread, or ask a mod to unlock the thread so you could do the editing for that one post. Or do a rewrite and ask a mod to unlock the thread so you can put the re-written version in the original posts place.
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